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    Author: Blindly-N-Love
    ASL Info:    17/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 197/141/29
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 209
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 492



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       Please comment.. I like this.. My feelings exactly.. ITs not really an open discussion.. I thought that was a cool name.. Thanks!


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    I just sit around, thinking of his lies,
    Is there any way I'll be able to survive?
    But there is hope yet,
    My prince on his white horse, and chariot,
    Has finally arrived in my heart,
    But I don't want to let this romance start.
    I don't want to risk getting hurt again!
    But that's something we can all understand.
    Should I open my heart for the prince of my dreams,
    Or close it tight and sew the seems?




    Submitted on 2005-08-19 21:39:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      besides the common grammar errors and answering your own questions, i think this poem really was quite a good job... i enjoyed the shortness and the question at the end.. it made me think about past relationships.. good job.. keep writing

    dylanpoe
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo I'm kind of in the middle of the same predicament (I always wanted to use that word). I would expand on that, but your poem says it all... and it's written perfectly. There is nothing that I don't like about this. I like the lines:

    "Should I open my heart for the prince of my dreams,
    Or close it tight and sew the seems?"

    I would give you some kind of advice, but I don't even know what to tell myself yet. Good luck with everything, I hope it all goes well. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]



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