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    dots Submission Name: Timebombdots
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    Author: Cetilearo
    ASL Info:    15/femme/Calgary, Canada
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 35/34/6
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 771
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 391



    Description:
       I found that this poem was misunderstood. If you want to give it a shot, you can read the rest of the description after the poem.
    It's actually about how easily we are forgotten after we die. I originally had it under the category of 'Political' but I changed it to Society when I found that people were trying to asssociate it with voting... :S


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    dotsTimebombdots
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    Timebomb
    Bomb in time
    Killing our words
    Jumping with our souls
    Show us our eyes
    Suspended in sky
    You can't hear our cries
    We've already died
    "In which cold playground
    Do you which to lay?"
    First you must pay,
    First you must pay
    There were our lives...
    Written deep in the clay




    Submitted on 2005-08-19 22:15:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      too short... when explaining something political.

    unless you were just wanting to introduce something a little longer, kinda like a prologe, kinda summarizing a lot of points in this one.....

    you had a good topic, to talk of society being like a timebomb.. eventually enough people will disapprove and think a little more when in the voting booths...

    the playground line was kinda confusing, as so was the we've died already line because it wasnt explained......
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by solemnpen | [ Reply to This ]


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