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    dots Submission Name: Our Hidden Lovedots
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    Author: literary lover
    ASL Info:    18 Female Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 59/65/16
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 222
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 788



    Description:
       The full title is actually: Our Hidden Love (Started of Summer)

    It's about a love...that started last summer...that no one else knows about.....because others have a problem with it......yet it should be the sort of thing that's like "Well as long as their happy, we'll leave it alone." But the world's not that kind. Well, some people aren't anyway.

    But beyond any obstacle, social or otherwise, Love finds a way to endure, (kept as a secret or not). I wrote this mostly as a memoriam of last summer and in dedication to it.


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    dotsOur Hidden Lovedots
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    A sign, a signal, a simple suggestion
    a smile, a Slight breath.
    A mere impression, a small mention;
    any Small thing capable of depth.

    Fervent whispers, cryptic Love.
    A Summer held behind-backs and out-of-eyes;
    In our hearts a Romance Bud
    blossoming into True Love obscured in Lies.

    An unnoticed spark, a well-kept secret;
    under, over, around, avoid;a Careful cruise.
    Complications, complexities and conflict frequent.
    Delicate yet Willful Love cannot lose, will not bruise.

    Worth the effort and hidden war,
    a Lifetime Love from a Summer Romance.
    (yet Truth spoken only inside, still a Secret ever more)
    a constant struggling Crawl yet graceful Dance.




    Submitted on 2005-08-20 00:16:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is definately worthy of the romance you're speaking of. and the first four lines are AMAZING! i loved the opening so much. don't get me wrong the rest was great but honestly i think those lines could be a poem in their own right lol. i've never had a hidden love so i can't comment on the emotional side of things but i can say this, if you love someone it shouldn't be a secret. any time, any where, who ever's around it shoudln't matter. you tell them you love them. great work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh for summer love / romance ! This brought many memories rushing into my mind of how it used to be. This is one of the best things I have read since being on this site. The flow was right and the ambiguity of the rhyme was perfect. You struck a chord with me and I connected. That is what writing is all about. A superb piece of writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]



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