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    dots Submission Name: Dam Destroyerdots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 842
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    Description:
       It is about holding back love.


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    dotsDam Destroyerdots
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    Love,
    she held it back and
    let it pool into a lake
    until it stagnated.
    The alkaloid content
    built and then killed
    anything
    that dared grow
    in the water.

    Most mapped their journey
    around the stench.
    Then came one,
    a person of purpose.
    The mischievous missionary
    attacked the foundation
    of her protection.
    Blow after blow of
    a jackhammer's drum roll
    pounded till it opened
    a tiny hole
    and started the trickle.

    Each drop eroded a piece
    of the well poured wall
    of artificial stone.
    Suddenly the whole
    dam thing crumbled.
    It released a flood
    of destruction
    through the valley
    that ran on
    and was absorbed
    in the ocean.
    The mud dried.
    A new life
    emerged.

    She smiles at the flowers
    and allows all that will
    stop to stay awhile and
    drink from the water.

    She offers a prayer
    of thankfulness
    to the powerful
    and persistent
    dam destroyer
    that moved on
    to another
    reservoir.




    Submitted on 2005-08-20 09:13:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Disappointments can lead to the thickest, strongest walls sprouting around us, ostensibly for our protection; when, in reality, they become the dank prison that poisons our outlook on life. I suppose we should be thankful for those intrepid souls that scale the wall and liberate us. Everything about this write is organic( style, word choice, form), as if it were the garden of tenderness that sprouted after the fact. Beautifully done.
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      i cant even begin to tell how awesome this write is. wow! im floored with this one. the dam in the heart and the stored energy behind it. the wall is fitting the defense mechanism or the disconnection that one has. the jackhammer i could percieve as communication or another's love trying to break through. once released the water rushes out in freedom and to the earth it goes to feed life. awesome work here. hats off!

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-09-25 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my! A definite fave!
    It gave me chills!

    Don't we all build walls around us, and wear masks to keep ppl from hurting us?
    Till someone comes along, someone who is different and willing to see through all the protection that we so carefully worked.

    And all our feelings that were eating us up inside, good, bad or ugly come out in a great flow. A flow that is relieving and leaves us lighthearted.

    I wonder what it will all be like if we did not build "dams" as u call it, would we have a better world?

    This is a magnificent poem in its simplicity. Sometimes we need to open up to be happy, to release our anger and torments to turn our inner lake into an ever flowing river, glittering and clean, unlike the stench of the stagnant water.

    Thank u for this poem, it gave me the advice I needed in this moment.

    Viviane
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      this brings to mind an experience I had when someone said just this one word that made me almost fall on the floor and all my feelings felt like they were flowing out of me. all the pain. for a couple of days I felt better. but the damn dutch boy must have plugged the hole up again. I'm back to my old wall-up self! this was an excellent read. a very well-done write. it's funny how some people come along and reinvent us. even if it was not their intention.
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice. Pretty wistful at the end, I liked the way you finished it, saying that even though that particular love didn't last, it changed her outlook on love and life for ever.

    There are a lot of good things in here, I smiled at "the whole dam thing crumbled" it brought an earthy, realistic feel to the poem.

    Very well done indeed, I loved it

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, the word flow is constant..like water(erf...hmm, connection?). I like how descriptive a three word line can be. I can't see anything wrong with it...good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]


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