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    dots Submission Name: Imaginary Loverdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    57/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2777/1297/258
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 675
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       This is the result of observing a young woman overcome with an obsessive relationship with a man she hardly knew, to the extent she believed he already was hers, soon to be the father of her children. To fantasize about the 'perfect man' is one thing, to buy real estate in that deluded world is something entirely different. The young lady was 13 at the time; today she's 17, married to a man she hardly knows.

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    dotsImaginary Loverdots

    She wore her
    belly like a bloated
    badge, proud
    to be the recipient
    of such seed as
    pleased her dark,
    demonic lover;
    wailing and imperious,
    a tower of need
    imagined in
    such vivid
    detail, the man
    became a migraine,
    an etheral thing.
    She let drop the
    cool pillow and
    became a girl
    drifting in an
    abyss no
    tongue could

    Submitted on 2005-08-20 16:43:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Jesus Christ, you said an awful lot with such few words. I hate it when the description is longer than the piece! lol
    This is seriously good, but it seems to have black hatred behind it, it's almost a scathing judgement on something that you couldn't have.

    I liked it, though, black is good for me...

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      that was dark and a bit scary... sounds like they both have a bit of a problem if they are married at this point.. i can't imagine it will last. they both are going to need some help.. you painted a bleak picture here in so few words. obsession is a dangerous thing.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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