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    dots Submission Name: A Placedots

    Author: Naymless
    ASL Info:    15/F/phx, az
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 142/110/33
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       A short poem-kinda- that I wrote a while back. The begining sounds a little gothic, but towards the end you'll get the meaning of the whole thing.

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    dotsA Placedots

    There is a place,
    Where agony and despair are the clouds that fill the sky,
    Where the clouds produce the rain of death,

    The sun rises and sets with hate,
    As the moon rises and sets with anger,

    The wind passes through the grass with ease,
    Rivers flow freely,
    And mountains stand tall,
    But they do no produce beauty,
    They produce disease and pain,

    The people live with only the purpose of dying,
    So the flies may have a feast,
    And the maggots may have a home,

    But every once and a while you will see a tiny yellow bird pass by,
    And that bird does not show pain, agony, hate, or anger,
    It shows hope,
    The hope for a better life,
    No matter how hard the times it flies across the plains,
    Wanted or not,
    Because hope,
    Is comforting,
    The bird of hope is godís gift to his believers,
    And it will save them all.

    Submitted on 2005-08-20 17:33:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First off, I really like the title for some reason. Its very cryptic and its what made me read the poem in the first place.

    It did start out dark, but hey. It worked it made me keep reading in hopes of finding some sort of light. And it seemed at the end you did.

    Im not religious, and i dont believe in god, but im glad that you can have a sort of being to find strength in. The flow was differnet then most poems, but thats what made it all the more unique! Also you choice or words was fantastic! Awesome job!
    | Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by Phobos | [ Reply to This ]
      That was very good. It did start out on the dark side but eased into somthing wonderful. Great write. Good talent. Thank you for sharing with us. God bless
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      well. this is cute. and intelligent. and cold. and...cold. and cold. heh. well the world looks like a cold place to me at the moment too. so uh. we're in this together i guess. ha. well i hope we can fly with that little yellow bird. :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]

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