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    dots Submission Name: Simple Pleasuresdots
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    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 763
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    Bytes: 368



    Description:
       Ok this is another one i wrote 8 years ago, when i was 14. I just wanted to share it because i like the way it simply states that there are little things in the world worth noticing.


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    dotsSimple Pleasuresdots
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    See a seashell shine at night,
    Under a Luneristic enchanted light,
    Of the moon and her children the stars,
    The endless space of Jupiter and mars,
    They have a space all of there own,
    To listen to peace’s melodic tone,
    To see the galaxies in all their might,
    Is no more wonderful then seashells at night.




    Submitted on 2005-08-20 18:59:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's like... my new favourite midnight chant to sing while dancing naked in the forest under a full moon.
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Cetilearo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi,
    Are you sure you were only 14 when you wrote this piece?lol
    It's not a bad write.

    The endless space of Jupiter and Mars
    They have a space all of their own
    Oh yeah! A big "Space" I shall say. The comparison of the shells and the galaxies was brilliant. This is a keepsake for you I'm sure. Take care, wanda
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by bigfineq | [ Reply to This ]


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