Description: this was inspired by some of ravenwolf68s poems.. a lot of problems i have encountered, and i can proudly say i have confidently overcame all of them...
so this is just a little something, something.. to that effect..
Looking back to the past -------------------------------------------
reading and speeding
about and on things
that i got no business knowing
about
so many nightmares
turned to campfire tales
without one mention of
childcare
the past is some shit
but the truth still lives
Inspiration comes from
Lisa
her thoughts put on the page
are my mona lisa
it gives me my lyrical rage
to look back at my past
to give a smile and
holler "Fuck You"
without assistance
I stand on my own two feet
And scream "Kiss My Ass"
hmm..well, its a little confusing in the beginning, Cade. reading and speeding? and it's "I have no business" not "I got" you can do w/o the "on things" that screws up the first line. the 4th stanza, you can say "her thoughts on the page" it's a given that she put them on the page. mona lisa = Mona Lisa good job Cade :) nice piece
very hella kunfuzin...but it is good that people inspire you...llike youand troy and J inspire me...thas why ur seeing mor music..and stuff...thankx! but..ya wtf is reading and speedin?lol!
Well, this is something that is so very personal to you and I'm in no position to critique you on that...it was quite powerful though. Especially at the end there! "Kiss My Ass" is one of my most favorite phrases, let me tell you and it's good that you can look back on the bad and flip it the big ol bird! Nice write!
i can tell that it was some [censored] that was obviously important to you on a personal level. it was brash and direct. you gotta keep [censored] real. keep on livin homie~P
This [censored] here made me laugh. I don't neccesarily get it but it made me laugh. Do you rap? it sounds like this is something that would be better understood when read aloud. Kinda like spoken word. Nobody gets it until you preform and then there like ooooooh that's hot. Anyway thanx for the laugh.