hmm..well, its a little confusing in the beginning, Cade. reading and speeding? and it's "I have no business" not "I got" you can do w/o the "on things" that screws up the first line. the 4th stanza, you can say "her thoughts on the page" it's a given that she put them on the page. mona lisa = Mona Lisa good job Cade :) nice piece
Well, this is something that is so very personal to you and I'm in no position to critique you on that...it was quite powerful though. Especially at the end there! "Kiss My Ass" is one of my most favorite phrases, let me tell you and it's good that you can look back on the bad and flip it the big ol bird! Nice write!
This [censored] here made me laugh. I don't neccesarily get it but it made me laugh. Do you rap? it sounds like this is something that would be better understood when read aloud. Kinda like spoken word. Nobody gets it until you preform and then there like ooooooh that's hot. Anyway thanx for the laugh.