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    dots Submission Name: Who Dare Pass My Waydots
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    Author: Poetic Cure
    ASL Info:    49.f.mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 313/137/33
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 636



    Description:
       its about my cats


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    dotsWho Dare Pass My Waydots
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    Hiding in the shadows,
    cautiously waiting,
    to pounce an unsuspecting creature,
    who dare past my way.

    Sharpened blades ready to strike,
    with such speed... out of sight.

    Creating a wild blood curdling scream,
    from deep inside my very being.

    Causing hair to stand on end.
    Scaring them into mental existence.
    Sending them along bleeding and sobbing.

    Victory once again.

    Triumphantly returning to my hiding place.
    Cleaning my blades,
    dreaming of the next victum,
    who comes my way.





    Submitted on 2005-08-20 20:16:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm not sure I can really agree with some of the other commentors. My aunt had a cat that would stalk me. It wasn't all that cute. The darn thing scared me!
    That aside, I did enjoy this poem. It sounds like something my cat would do (I'm bigger than I was when my aunt's cat would do it).
    I didn't quite understand the "scaring them into mental exsitence" line. It seems to me that someone that scared would be scared out of mental existence, but it could be that I'm just not getting it. Good poem!
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by sphen | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write. Cats by their very nature are built upon stealth - this is how I see your poem. I also agree with the above spell - check comments. That apart, it was very good and well done.
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good considering it's from the perspective of a cat. I for one love cats, and I love your poem. I knew it was about a cat before I read your description. You should try writing more poems from the perspectives of other things. My only suggestion is that you use spell-check or something before posting it on here. Great write!
    | Posted on 2005-08-20 00:00:00 | by Mia | [ Reply to This ]
      really nice and soft its good change fro all the death poetry. this poem makes u feel ike a cat on the prow.great stuff keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Red Liquid | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, this is cute. I have three cats myself. Skitzo, Morris, and Slinky... I love them all to death. I pictured them all talking about a mean prank to play on humans while I was reading this. Even now Skitz is curled up in my lap watchin the computer monitor.
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminded me of my kitty...I love kitties...and how mean they can be and how sweet and this was an awesome poem...good good...

    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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