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    dots Submission Name: Translucent Balletdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was inspired by the artwork of Helen Frankenthaler. http://images.google.com/images?q=Helen%20Frankenthaler&hl=en&lr=&ie=UTF-8&oe=UTF-8&sa=N&tab=wi

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    dotsTranslucent Balletdots

    Translucent as chiffon,
    sweet, tender washes of colour,
    a glorious haze,
    but there is no order to the vision.
    It's a ballet of colorful flowers
    that were never taught to dance.

    Submitted on 2004-04-15 00:06:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i am going to check out Helen at school

    i love artwork that inspires writing....like this...

    flowers dancing in the breeze...a collage of color, not in a particular order or pattern or dance step....but steps full of joy...

    contagious youth.

    | Posted on 2011-09-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Reminds me of dance recitals. The smallest and most lovely of the costumed children in their gauzy colors and flower top hats....dancing in no particular order and yet full of joy!! What a beautiful image you conjured.
    | Posted on 2004-04-15 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't have a clue who Helen Frankenthaler is but I checked out the link and I have to say I like the pictures. and I like your poems. the iamges are fantastic. especially "a ballet of colorful flowers/That were never taught to dance".
    well done.
    | Posted on 2004-04-15 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was beautifully written, i loved how you used the word ballet, it was great short and sweet, great write!
    | Posted on 2004-04-15 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]

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