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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    you Know I have no clue
    what it is that makes me do what I do
    To myself, I'm true
    I don't lie, neither to me nor you
    do you hate me, man
    it's like those evil fuckin thoughts are trying to rap me, man
    is what they want you to believe
    they want to kill all of us, the government's some theives
    take our money, and chill tax free
    they done got the man mad, and that ain't the way to be
    Role through the white house, paint it yellow, black, and red
    look at how many done ended up dead
    burn down the white house, with bushy bush in it

    Submitted on 2005-08-21 01:02:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yo this is a really good write. how long have u been flowing? u covered a lotta good points in this and it's good when MCs are socially aware of everything going on around them.
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hey! i read this one b4! but i think my stepdad made me get off...so im commenting on it now! i think this is great ass great!i think u mean rape me instead of rap me...idk tho...man someone needs to punch bush right in the face!lol!

    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, political...very in depth actually, this questions democracy.

    'Role through the white house, paint it yellow, black, and red'

    I like this line best, I really like this peace, it makes the reader question the extent of freedom they have. Well done, keep writing
    - Illusion
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Illusion | [ Reply to This ]

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