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    dots Submission Name: "Love me!"dots

    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       this is simple to express a thought. a moment. that has played in my mind. not with anyone inpaticular.... well maybe.haha if i choose. " to thy own self be true. sigh simple love you know.

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    dots"Love me!"dots

    We both say I love you.
    Today setting their cuddling with you in your car I knew what I wanted to do.
    Warning you that I was going to do something completely emotional, you simple smiled and said “ok”, like it wasn’t going to be a big thing.
    Trembling, yet boldly I startled you by straddling you.
    Holding your face in my hands and with my blue eyes my soul folding out before you.
    “Love me!” The heart begins to break as the words desperately rang out.
    Holding me with your arms around my waist, you paused wonderingly for a second.
    Then you said. “I already do.”
    Collapsed, against you my neck touching yours feeling the heat gleaming off of you which intensified the moment. The sun beaming through the glass casting a golden emit from the setting of another gorgeous Alaskan sunset.

    Submitted on 2005-08-21 01:09:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Sensual and sweet :D
    No smut or perverse statements.
    A rather adorable cliché!

    Well done indeed!
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]
    Ive always wanting to take a cruise thru Alaska I here its beautiful
    You only make me want to do that more with this write
    Great Job

    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-11-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
    Wouldn't it be great if this happened to everybody.
    Movies just aren't doing it anymore.
    Well - pretty subject matter.
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by writhe | [ Reply to This ]
      its something that makes you think twice about what you have... maybe even about what you'd like to have.
    i just feel it would have been much better off if you had ended with 'i already do'. the last bit appears superfluous.
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]

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