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Author: star_on_fire22
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im alone. no one loves me. i will be alone forever. is this even worth it? why dont i just die and see if it is? i am ruining peoples lives.. i hate myself.. yeah not a good one but please comment...


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i keep trying to be happy,
hoping, wishing, dreaming of it
why cant i be like everyone else?
why cant i have friends?
why cant i be loved?
all i ever wanted was to be loved really
i try to say im over my depression.
but i dont really believe its true
atleast when i look at him
i dont feel like im dieing.
now its just pain because my life is so messed up,
and i cant do a thing about it.
i have no life.
when i hang out with friends im always the third wheel.
left out, alone, and unwanted.
they only invite me out so i dont feel alone.
but i know they dont want me there.
im ruining my best friends relationship.
if her boy friend leaves her its because of me.
i know i make her mad but shes too kind to say so.
no one likes me.
im alone.
in this darkness.
im fading away...




Submitted on 2005-08-21 02:31:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  humm I only read illusions comment and I think it's rather unfair...no one knows what goes on within the next person and it is not fair to judge and say just "snap out of it" I can tell right off the bat that you are in need of attention...every description for your posts seems like an outcry...(and i dont mean you need attention in a negative way)

I'm glad though that you are channeling your depression through writing...just keep your chin up because though you feel unloved I know that isn't true...

Tina
| Posted on 2005-10-19 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  a lot of emotions in that one, but what id like to see is less talk of alone and explain a bit more how you got to this stage, u dont wake up one morning being totally alone and have no one there, i'd like some more explanation to it but other than that its a good start, jus think more about the small details in it that make a huge difference
| Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by razorblade kiss | [ Reply to This ]
  Uh-oh. Sounds like you're not feeling too good about yourself. I would love nothing more than to give you some helpful advice, but I've been having the same feelings lately and I still don't know what to do or say about it. I'll let you know if I figure it out though. Anywho, back to commenting...

I like the wording. It's kind of simple, but in a very good way. The flow was awesome. You express yourself wonderfully. I really hope that everything gets better for you. I'm sure it will... Give it time. Appearantly everything takes time. Thats what I hear. Anyways, good luck with stuff. I know we don't exactly know each other, but if you ever need to talk, I am always willing to listen. I know I've probably told you before, but I mean it... you're talented. As always, Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  God’s sake, people need to snap out of this self-pity stage in their lives, you think you have it bad, a million other people have it worse. And this whole no one loves me thing, its crap, you properly do have a lot of people who care for you and love you. The only reason you feel alone is because you exclude everyone, then it becomes a habit, you don't want to get hurt so you let no one get close. And this 'hoping to be normal' you must realise that normal does not exist, we are all different and we must all be proud of that, you do have talents, use them! (Sorry for the lecture...actually, I’m not that sorry) right, the poem, it’s a nice flow, it very emotional, all in all I like it Keep writing
- Illusion
| Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Illusion | [ Reply to This ]


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