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    dots Submission Name: Love Is A Liedots
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    Author: LoneWolf
    ASL Info:    16/F/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.35 - 136/108/19
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
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    Description:
       this is something totally different that i wanted to try. it's one of those things where the first letters make a message! they always had these in those english tests i had to take, and i thot they were cool! but the 'poems' on the tests really sucked it had no rhythm or rhyme or flow. and it said things like "the sky is the limit" or "a smile is .... uh i dont' remember!" yup so this is totally new to me! ^.^


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    dotsLove Is A Liedots
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    Love is life
    Or so they say
    Vows are made
    Everywhere, every way

    Is that all we should do?
    Say to him, "I love you"?

    Anyone can do that

    Life is not like that now
    Idiots, ignorant fools!
    Everyone wants to love, but how?




    Submitted on 2005-08-21 07:54:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ooo This is awesome! Very creative. I love how the first letters spell something. The flow and rhyming is good too. That's great. Excellent wording. Wow. I don't even know what else to say. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      I saw a comment from you on Tia's site and had to come check this out. I really like the format of this piece. I agree that most times people don't do a good job in the rhyming or delivery with this type of poetry, but you have done well.

    I think that 'love' isn't an emotion all unto itself. It's is made up of selflessness, compassion, and genuine concern for others. Maybe the problem is that we have been led to believe that love is an emotion, not a combination of other emotions. But, I'm a wierd one, so maybe I'm wrong.

    Either way, this is a great piece!
    Thanks for sharing!
    -Chell-
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. No one can teach you how to love - it has to come from the heart and of course it depends on what type of love you are looking for or reffering to (there are many different types and levels of love). Love will always be fraught with danger, but it really is the greatest gift that can be given - or received.
    | Posted on 2005-08-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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