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    dots Submission Name: Poetic Souldots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Nan recently dedicated a poem to me.
    I thought she would not mind if I returned the favor.

    Perhaps this fits all the writers that open and pour from their poetic souls.

    Some people inspire you by poking and prodding. Others do it by just being who they are.

    I wrote this from the first person plural perspective. I am certain that I am not alone in my appreciation.


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    dotsPoetic Souldots
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    You are sincerely
    a poetic soul.
    I imagine your life
    as a free form poem.

    We are grateful
    you allow us to watch
    as you
    attempt to appease
    your muse.

    Vivid images
    in uneven verses,
    filling the world
    with until now
    unseen wonders and
    benevolent beauty.

    As you write.
    all we are
    is like a simile stage
    and our world
    a metaphor
    of players

    When you pen words
    diversity in emotions
    and sensuality
    take center stage
    in an angler's
    vaudeville drama.

    A drum roll announces
    the star's entrance
    and a rim shot rings
    a "Gotcha!"
    as we bite the bait.

    We are reeled in
    and then
    thrown back to swim
    the universe
    until another
    delightful piece
    is dangled before us.
    When you cast your line
    even the fish enjoys fishing.

    Thank you
    may never be enough
    for all you have given us.




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      Wow. I don't think anyone would have thought to write a poem on this matter. Its very simple, but has a lot of meaning to it. I really can't see anything wrong with this. It's beautiful.
    | Posted on 2005-11-22 00:00:00 | by Spiderman | [ Reply to This ]
      
    What a wonderful tribute by one poetic soul for another. I really love that, it's so sweet and- can you feel the love? I can! :D

    I really enjoyed reading this, the imagery is beautiful and delightful as always,
    even the fish enjoys fishing very original!

    Thank you for the read!

    Alexis
    | Posted on 2005-10-08 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a lovely tribute from a poetic soul to another. A very sort of literal piece, but havinga purity to it because of that language .. a lovely honesty to it that made me smile.

    thanks for a warm , lovely and fitting poem for a good poet.

    thanks
    norselike,
    Christian
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by x-ianhoyskolt | [ Reply to This ]
      I am amazed how from simple simple things u can make art!

    You have a rich mind and this is only how I can explain that out of the most common things, out of things we see everyday and do not notice, u make a art!

    You convey it all simply, very simply that the poem attaches ur reader from the 1st word till the last and he/she end up with a smile on the face.

    You have achieved a great description of how inspiration came to the poet without even using the words muse or inspiration!
    All in "vivid imagery"

    Thank you for sharing ur work with the rest of us, u certainly are inspiring!

    Viviane
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by babyblue002 | [ Reply to This ]
      We are reeled in
    and then
    thrown back to swim

    i liked that.. it all goes back to my beliefs of the poet being the puppeteer by playing with peoples emotions.. kind of like a "strings attached" cliché.. i enjoyed this because of what was said and how the descriptions were used.. you went from simple to difficult with the lines and the words. and that is what i liked.. good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by dylanpoe | [ Reply to This ]
      This is wonderful, and what a perfect way to pay tribute to someone that has made such a diffrence.
    You are very right about the diffrent ways people inspire you to do better and change...there have been many of those here for me as well.
    This was written with such caring sensitivity, and straight from the heart.
    I also love the analogy about fishing, and to think I thought I hated fishing,lol.
    Until next read
    Denise
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a beautiful dedication to Nan, she is indeed a poetic soul who writes from the depths of her heart and soul.

    like you say, this could refer to many poets who share their souls with us from the page. appeasing the muse is what we all try to do, i think.
    this has a wonderful flow, kind of like a river running free with fish dancing in the cool water looking for sustenance.
    thanks for sharing your gifts with us too!
    peace&poetry
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Chrystine,

    Thanks so much for writing this. It's good to know you see into me and can call me a poetic soul. As for the way I write, the fishing metaphor is a great description. A good storyteller hides the details and creates nearly a "punch line"
    surprise at the end. I guess it's similar to a joke in many ways. I can assure you I am not conscious of the way things are composed, I am faithful and loyal to listening when a opportunity strikes me. To know it is amusing for someone else, and sharing here at elite is something I truly love.
    Thanks again for this new fave,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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