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    dots Submission Name: A Dancing Romancedots
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    Author: literary lover
    ASL Info:    18 Female Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 59/65/16
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 279
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I couldn't sleep so I thought I'd make use of the extra awake hours and do (write) something constructive. Any comments & advice is appreciated. It's 10 to 5 in the morning, & with the lack of sleep and thought-process not functioning properly, it's hard to tell if this is good or not.


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    dotsA Dancing Romancedots
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    Softness whispers a breezing breath.
    Brushing by, a whimsical sigh.
    Fluttering eyes and flittering heart,
    a soaring soul, a rapturous cry.

    Maybe he won't, Maybe he will,
    oh, impatient contemplation!
    Filling my thoughts, granting a chill,
    sweet temptation, luring fascination.

    A swooping chance, once-in-a-lifetime dance;
    romance unfolding in elegance and grace.
    In good company with a tantalizing glance,
    a caressing kiss, an everlasting embrace.

    Witness death of silence as Song rings on
    in our enamored thoughts and fancied lore.
    The inspiring spark lingers through the night
    engaged in hypnotic flight across the empty floor.




    Submitted on 2005-08-22 04:01:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      For someone very tired and sleepless, I thought this was excellent. I liked the structure and the rhyme worked (disjointed in the second verse though). Really really good - you have lots of potential - of that I am sure.
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]



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