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    dots Submission Name: Her Pretty Facedots
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    Author: Saaber
    ASL Info:    20/m/BD
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101/99/26
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
    Total Views: 275
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    dotsHer Pretty Facedots
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    Whenever I try to settle down in some place,
    The first thing I remember is her pretty face.
    When shall I see her again
    Is she somewhere near?
    Where in the whole world is she?
    Will fate ever again make her meet me?

    I tried to tell her that I love her,
    Tried to show I want her,
    But I could not do it well enough,
    And now her pretty face haunts me,
    Wherever I go.

    So I just left her behind with the rest of my past
    And lie there as long as our lifetimes last.
    But if I ever meet her again someday,
    ‘Love you still’ I’ll surely say.

    Loved you I certainly have
    But I was forced to leave you
    Forced by none other than you
    Forced to turn myself away to some place
    Where never again I would find your pretty face.




    Submitted on 2005-08-22 07:31:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is great! I loved it! keep up the good work! Keep writing, and keep rhyming! You are a geat friend aslo!


    jessica
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by jslbabygirl101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the way you used rythm at some lines, and at yet others matched nothing else. You show emotions well, and it makes for an easy read when I can relate with it. it is one of the better poems that I have found since I found this site, and I like it well enough to dogear it on my favorites page. I am impressed to find such a good poem without any real flow or rythm to it. I like how you write, more like how you think it not how some would dictate the way it should be.
    | Posted on 2006-01-23 00:00:00 | by ThisIsMyLfe | [ Reply to This ]
      NIceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee, certainly. Who is that special girl????????????????????? anyways... ur thoughts were clear. U didn't follow any rythm, but thats okey right. Thanks for all ur comments... Keep writing, I am adding this one to my favoritesssssssssss.
    | Posted on 2006-01-19 00:00:00 | by afsana | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with onetruesmartass. check your rhymin dude. which one of d gals r ya talkin about here? i do feel sorry for you if what you wrote really happenedk, but i'm in no mood for takin revenge so d gal is safe (for a while).
    good write! but u've written buttur.
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, I totally get what your trying to say here, but the off and on rhyming makes it kinda hard to read because it throws the rythem off. Other than that, this is a great piece about love lost. Good job.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]



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