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My Love


Author: Saaber
ASL Info:    20/m/BD
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 101 /99 /26
Words: 74
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Hey, readers. I am trying a new approach to writing here. Hope you like it. All comments welcome.


My Love



She is the one who dwells
Here, in my heart
Enticingly beautiful and
Hard to leave apart.
My sweet angel she is,
It is a fact none shall know,
She is the queen of my dreams,
Maybe it does not always show
Yet I know she is the one
Left in me when everything is gone
Of course I maybe misguided,
Virtually fooled by love that
Eventually, my life will be happily ended.




Submitted on 2005-08-22 07:38:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A strong and beautiful poem. flowed nicely.good description. I fell in love, nothing more to say.

Soph
| Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by Soph | [ Reply to This ]
  Ooo I love this. Every line is so strong. That's great. I'm not sure, but I'm thinking this is the first time I've read anything by you, and I'm really glad I did. My favorite part was:

"She is the queen of my dreams,
Maybe it does not always show
Yet I know she is the one
Left in me when everything is gone"

I love that, as well as the rest of it. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  this is awsome! it says exactly what i feel and it just reminds you of that certain some one we all hold dear and near our hearts. it's strong and passionate.

this is my favpart:

'She is the queen of my dreams,
Maybe it does not always show
Yet I know she is the one
Left in me when everything is gone'
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by sword stalker | [ Reply to This ]


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