Holy Water

Author: Nynaeve ASL Info:    23, female, Israel Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43 /67 /28 Words: 47

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Holy Water

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Rain drops Falling through me Sliding down my curves Absorbing me Drowning my thirst Washing my emptiness away flooding me whole Erasing my decay. I sit in the rain Letting the filth wash away Sitting quietly Without a stir Hoping for a better day.

Submitted on 2005-08-22 07:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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oh wow.. that was really nice and refreshing.. I wish at times it was that easy and it can be I guess? Love the way you get right to the point no division getting off to something else.. it was very simple but brutally honest. mauh penny

| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]

This is great. The rhyming and flow was amazing. Excellent words and descriptions. I wish I could forget about the past and feel pure again. I've realized that it's a lot harder than it sounds. Oh well. Good luck with everything. I like this one a lot. Great job -nikkki

| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

This is sooooooooo good. I also sometimes wish it were that easy to be pure again but I guess it isn't. Anyway you have just put one wish in a poem. The usage of the correct words is what add more to the beauty of your poem. It is a very new topic. This is one of the best poems I have read on this site. You have chosen the best title it really captures ones attention, and the it is what titles suppose to do Well done with love shabnam

| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]

A very nice write! I guess we all have something from our past we need, or want, to be cleansed of. "Washing my emptiness away erasing my decay hoping for a bettr day" I like those lines.. they convey your thoughts wonderfully in this poem. Good work! ~Sandra

| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

i liekd it. i've felt like that too. i think you protrayed your messege very well and the flow and wording was very good as well. i liked the theme. i've felt like well being pure again alot in my past so i think i understand where your comming form good job.

| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]

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