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Holy Water


Author: Nynaeve
ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43 /67 /28
Words: 47
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Wanting to forget about the past and feel pure again.


Holy Water



Rain drops
Falling through me
Sliding down my curves
Absorbing me

Drowning my thirst
Washing my emptiness away
flooding me whole
Erasing my decay.

I sit in the rain
Letting the filth wash away
Sitting quietly
Without a stir
Hoping for a better day.




Submitted on 2005-08-22 07:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh wow.. that was really nice and refreshing.. I wish at times it was that easy and it can be I guess?

Love the way you get right to the point no division getting off to something else.. it was very simple but brutally honest.

mauh
penny
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
  This is great. The rhyming and flow was amazing. Excellent words and descriptions. I wish I could forget about the past and feel pure again. I've realized that it's a lot harder than it sounds. Oh well. Good luck with everything. I like this one a lot. Great job

-nikkki
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  This is sooooooooo good. I also sometimes wish it were that easy to be pure again but I guess it isn't.
Anyway you have just put one wish in a poem. The usage of the correct words is what add more to the beauty of your poem.
It is a very new topic.
This is one of the best poems I have read on this site.
You have chosen the best title it really captures ones attention, and the it is what titles suppose to do
Well done with love shabnam
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
  A very nice write! I guess we all have something from our past we need, or want, to be cleansed of.

"Washing my emptiness away
erasing my decay
hoping for a bettr day"

I like those lines.. they convey your thoughts wonderfully in this poem.

Good work!
~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  i liekd it. i've felt like that too. i think you protrayed your messege very well and the flow and wording was very good as well. i liked the theme. i've felt like well being pure again alot in my past so i think i understand where your comming form good job.
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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