Description: THis was from me and Cory...true story man...we were in the car and I fell asleep...before I had I told him that I just wanted to sleep and get to wake up with him there with me and he was like you will in the future...well when I fell asleep in his car he woke me up kissing me and he said,
'welcome to the future' it was so awesome...tell me what you think of this, I like it...I think.
Welcome To THe Future -------------------------------------------
tears trailed down his face
'welcome to the future'
as he kissed her awake
this was his gift
a glimpse into what he knew they would be
she opened her eyes
with his mouth on hers
she kissed him over and over again
she felt like such a little girl
and he watched her try to figure him out
and she hoped she made him happy
and they sat in the car
and welcomed the future
Awww...thats wonderful... True story? That Corey is a cool guy...I approve...(Although I am sure that it wouldn't matter if I did or not...lol) I don't see why Raivn doesn't like him... The poem was sweet...I liked how it was written in the third perspn. The line 'I felt like such a little girl' made me laugh. Very good job on this poem.
hmmmmm i think that you could have written more on here. i like the concept just i think there could be more than what you wrote. i thuoght the title was interesting too "welcome to the future". it reminds me of "back to the future" though. but thats ok. but i do agree that you did leave this with us wanting to read more. so maybe if something else happens make a part 2??? that would be kool too. anyways i say make it longer with some detail and its perfect!