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    dots Submission Name: Fairy Taledots
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    Author: DeadGod
    ASL Info:    20/M/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 61/103/31
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       This is a promise. I don't make very many of them, so it's important.

    Read this twice. I had no idea how much it sounded like sex when I wrote it.


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    dotsFairy Taledots
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    I can almost forget how little I know you, but
    I know this much:

    That is only to say that one morning, we shall hear the sound of wet on dry,
    and know that the time has come to abandon reason.

    For you see, I hate the rain.

    But I will lead you out into showers that, like paint,
    spot our wools and satins with deeper shades of color.

    I will bow before you, and should
    you take my hand, we will dance.

    As water collects in the folds of leaves, so shall it be, between
    our hands and lips and eyes and hips.

    We will hear the laughter of fairies, echoing on moss,
    to see the giants pray with bent knees and clasped fingers.

    And my eyes will open for a moment in blindness,
    lost in the dark rivulets of hair fastened to your skin,
    and I will taste your scent the way I know that you will taste mine.

    Just don't ask me for meaning.

    A poet never lies.

    -----Padraig Nolan
    8/19/05




    Submitted on 2005-08-22 14:57:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You're right, some of it sounds suggestive, but it's not crude at all. I know I'm suppose to criticize as well as compliment, but I can't say honestly that there's somthing here I don't like.
    It's so romantic, and I love the Images you conjure up. Such as:
    "But I will lead you into showers that, like paint,
    will spot our wools and satins with deeper shades of color". This is the type of poem I want to copy on paper and keep for myself to read again and again.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I love that. The words are so pretty. It's sweet. And yeah, lol it does sound a little bit like sex in some parts, but it's all good. I love everything about this. I have nothing but compliments for you. I don't think I've ever read any of your stuff before... I never knew you were so talented. Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Man, i really like your work, especially this. I see a lot of classic poet's style in your work. It shows you do your research. I like the last stanza the most. I think that is an awsome way to describe making love in the dark. The rythem and structure were interesting and unique. The ryme sceme was not reduntant like most of the pieces i see. I can't find anything to critique!
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]


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