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The Days Dreams

Author: lainie75
ASL Info:    30/f/uk
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Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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aaawww just been a mentally wandering

The Days Dreams

As i stare through the rain stained window.
My thoughts wander to a land far away.
Where the fairies live with the pixies ,
and they love to dance , sing and play.

Its the land , where the grass is always greener.
And the sky is the brighest of blue.
Where the flowers dance in the friendly whispers
of the wind as he passes on through.

Where the trees are umbrellas of protection.
To all underneath big or small.
And its leaves are autumns pefection.
When they fall they give comfort to all.

Where the sun is a hot burning fire ,
up high so we're kept nice and warm.
Where the moon is a torch lights desire ,
led to safety it keeps us from harm.

As i stare through the rain stained window.
My thoughts wander back from the land far away.
As i think of the pleasures i had there.
It helps me to get through the day.

Submitted on 2005-08-22 17:16:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Can I buy a ticket to go there. My luck the it's fully booked. Nowhere land has always been my dream. It's real you know. Well written, you lead me right there. Really one of my favs!
| Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ]
  Ahhh I love the description of your fantasy land, a utopia of sorts. Reading this I really began to smile and imagine this world. thank you for that. Though I loved it, really I did the flow seemed a little blotchy in parts, sort of rushed or forced but it was still a good write.
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
  Ahhhh...! How nice to see you have broken your silence with such a lovely daydreaming poem! I cant think of a better thing to write about than daydreaming! I think I could use some more daydreams in my world! You have written this just beautifully! I love the visualization I have of that window with the raindrops trickling down and the sound of windblown rain hitting against it, while gazing off into a gray background to somewhere else more appealing. Just great! Ok...did I remember everything I said the first time?? Hee-hee!You make me laugh you know!Much appreciated too! Nice poem! Take care!

| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice day dream! Escape is what they're all about and that's just what reading this poem did for me. It's very descriptive and it reads well. The rhymes are just fine. Great job there's nothing here I can see to criticize.
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW! What a day dream...I wish I could have one like that would take me to such a lovely place far away from the reality of every day life for a while. Everybody needs that every once in a while to relax before returning to reality. I really like the 2nd verse and the last one. Nice job!
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
  i wish i was here. i feel like the rhyme seemed kinda forced in places. just my opinion. but i love the scene you set up. very peaceful and relaxing. i really liked this.
| Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow! This was great Lainie. I loved the theme of the poem. I loved the flow and I thought that your choice of words used was fantasic. I'm glad you got your grovve back with writing. Great job.
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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