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    dots Submission Name: The Life Of A Nice Guydots
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    Author: dx10687
    ASL Info:    22 / M / IA
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 13/19/18
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 819
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 976



    Description:
       Helps to explain a situation I am going through and my lifestyle. For feedback I would like wording help, help with the flow, and run by me any verses that u think would be good. This is just a rough draft. i just wrote it today (Aug 22)

    ~*EDIT*~ (Aug 31)
    I have added a verse, changed the wording for hopefully a better flow, and changed the title.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Life Of A Nice Guydots
    -------------------------------------------


    (chorus)
    Trying to live the life of a nice guy
    is so hard, because you want everything
    to turn out perfect for everyone but then
    you learn that sometimes
    it will be next to impossible

    Most of the time situations
    where not everyone will be happy
    are situations that arise from
    being in a relationship

    (chorus)

    Nice guys have to be careful
    Cuz if they are dating someone
    and then break up they gotta be
    careful with their next move

    (chorus)

    Cuz this is when it can be hard
    Cuz if you want to ask
    one of their friends out
    Nice guys will want to try and
    make sure that everything will be all right

    (chorus)

    You can also run into
    this problem in friendships
    but if the person is true to you
    They should forgive you in the end

    (chorus)




    Submitted on 2005-08-22 17:45:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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