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    dots Submission Name: LAURA ( my daughter)dots

    Author: lainie75
    ASL Info:    30/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 276/254/32
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       For my Daugther

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    dotsLAURA ( my daughter)dots

    My precious daughter Laura.
    With eyes of sapphire blue.
    I'm writing down my feelings
    The ones i have for you.

    My Love for you is powerful.
    More than , you'll ever know.
    And I'll protect you through your life.
    And never will i go.

    Even when you cannot see me.
    Please know , that i am there.
    Carried round inside your heart.
    Are the memories that we share.

    I tell you your my baby.
    Even though your nine years old.
    Your a beautiful young lady.
    Unique , they broke the mould.

    Though time will make us older.
    Your mam i'll always be.
    my love will last forever.
    Through all eternity.

    love you lawlee
    mam x x x

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    This was written very well
    The love for your daughter shines so bright
    Its so Beautiful to see
    For your Daughter will continue to carry that love forward making the World a more beautiful and safe place to be
    Thank You for sharing this
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-11-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Lainie , It's been a long time!

    This piece is as precious as Laura must be. So sweet and full of love. How lucky she is to have you for a "Mam"!
    I wonder how she reacted when she read this "love letter"

    Just beautiful Lainie!

    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
      awww how cute! you clearly love your daughter, and thats so great, theres no way she'll be able to miss that. this reminds me of my mom! aw i love her so much, thanks for the smile on this one
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      You are going to make me cry over this one. This was so moving and emotional. I thought the fact it was a personal poem made this amazing. I know Laura will treasure this her whole life. Great job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww Lanie, this is very nicely done. You're right, you can write again!

    The flow was good, and the rhyme didn't seem forced at all.

    You're gradually building up a neat little folio of poems written to your kids that they'll treasure for ever.

    Very well done.

    Be Happy

    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      very sweet ode to your daughter. children are precious and need loving and nurturing guidance. it's refreshing to know there are people like you who cherish their children and are there for them throughout their lives. can't critique this one, it is from the heart.
    @ Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww! Elaine this is such a lovely poem for your daughter! I am sure this will warm her heart and put a smile on her face! This is very well written with beautiful heartfelt expression! I can only imagine the bond the two of you share and certainly is priceless! You have written a very sweet poem here! Take care!

    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWWWW i loved it it was soo nice i wouldnt call it serious if u could put a second one i would like put like loving err somthing like that but yeah such a strong piece i just read a verry funny poem then went straight away and read this one (the tears starting flowing) i loved it.
    keep writing
    liam/patrick <3
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
      The unconditional love of a mother is such a wonderful thing...you will always love your child no matter what. The last verse is absolutely beautiful! As I started reading this I was wondering how old Laura is, but you answered that question and that is one thing I really liked about it. Very good job here Elaine!
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Doris Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      And I will never hear those words from my own mother, but I can appreciate the powerful sweetness of this poem. It was beautiful, and very strong in feeling. Maybe my mother will never say those things to me because my eyes are dark brown, almost black sometimes. I always wanted blue eyes...oh well. I feel like saying thank you on behalf of your own Laura, I know I would appreciate something like this
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a beautiful poem for your daughter, as I'm sure she will love it and it will make her happier than ever. This was a very loving poem that you have here. I see nothing wrong with it at all. The poem is a great gift to your daughter just like you are to her. Hoping for many happy years for you together :)

    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I only can say - beautiful...but of course the comment nazis would never let me say just that.

    You have such a way of touching me when you write about such personal things. A very beautiful daughter is a wonderful gift, especially when it's received by such a beautiful mother...
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]

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