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Author: Poeticprincess ASL Info:    18/f/Germany Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104 Words: 99

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Love, if i'm your light are you my star if i'm lost do you look far if i ever hurt you did you forget if i'm her enemy is he your threat if i'm cold are you warm if i'm mad will you wait out the storm if i'm a fool are we in love when you see me everyday do you thank the stars above If i'm your moon are you my sun if i ever cheated are we done if we come last have they won and if they are two are we one

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