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A poem for mom and dad

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 138
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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this is my poem on cutting.

A poem for mom and dad

Dear mom and dad i wrote this poem just for you:

For a while now
i've been destroying myself
and everyone says
what i'm doing is bad for my health

But you've never noticed this
not really mom and dad
every moment that passes
could be the last ones i have

you've never noticed the blades
or the cuts on my arms are deep
instead you ignore it
you turn the other cheek

maybe you've never really noticed
maybe you don't understand
but since you've never noticed
the blade is still in my hand

so look right now
as i make a public display
of something you've never notice
something i did before this day

look at the blade
look at my skin
please look right now
before i do myself in

Submitted on 2005-08-22 20:11:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is very emotional i cut well sometimes when theres nothing else i can do! anytway the flow was aesome! and i hope ur parents can help u soon before its to late! well f not im still here!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow! thsi was awesum! i agree the flow was excillent. I think it does hurt when you cut and your parents cant see it, and they dont realize what your doing and dont bother to help. thsi is sad too. i liked it alot. it was the parfect length and didnt take linf to read. this has to become a favorite ot i may get to depressed! hope things get better.

| Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
  the flow and the rhyming were so on point. like i was rapping this as i read it. i don't approve of cutting and i'm not a big fan of it but this poem is really good. i thought that it would be a poem about something else from the title. i'm glad i read it though.
| Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  i really liked it.. i think the length was good it was straight to the point and the flow and rythm was awesome and it fit on so well.. keep safe k? stay alive so you can keep writing stuff for me to read...
| Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
  its good, it sounds like you really need to comfront your parents about whats wrong, im really sorry that your parents dont notice im lucky mine did or my friends did and my friends told my parents, if this is true about you and your parents you really should get help.
| Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by stateXofXmind | [ Reply to This ]
  it was good, the emotion to reaching out to your parents felt real, i personaly think it had good flow, real emotion, but it cut off to soon, but still liked it

| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by BlindToYou | [ Reply to This ]

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