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    dots Submission Name: A poem for mom and daddots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 970
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       this is my poem on cutting.


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    dotsA poem for mom and daddots
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    Dear mom and dad i wrote this poem just for you:

    For a while now
    i've been destroying myself
    and everyone says
    what i'm doing is bad for my health

    But you've never noticed this
    not really mom and dad
    every moment that passes
    could be the last ones i have

    you've never noticed the blades
    or the cuts on my arms are deep
    instead you ignore it
    you turn the other cheek

    maybe you've never really noticed
    maybe you don't understand
    but since you've never noticed
    the blade is still in my hand

    so look right now
    as i make a public display
    of something you've never notice
    something i did before this day

    look at the blade
    look at my skin
    please look right now
    before i do myself in




    Submitted on 2005-08-22 20:11:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is very emotional i cut well sometimes when theres nothing else i can do! anytway the flow was aesome! and i hope ur parents can help u soon before its to late! well f not im still here!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! thsi was awesum! i agree the flow was excillent. I think it does hurt when you cut and your parents cant see it, and they dont realize what your doing and dont bother to help. thsi is sad too. i liked it alot. it was the parfect length and didnt take linf to read. this has to become a favorite ot i may get to depressed myself.lol! hope things get better.

    XxXSuicidalxxChildXxX
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      the flow and the rhyming were so on point. like i was rapping this as i read it. i don't approve of cutting and i'm not a big fan of it but this poem is really good. i thought that it would be a poem about something else from the title. i'm glad i read it though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-13 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it.. i think the length was good it was straight to the point and the flow and rythm was awesome and it fit on so well.. keep safe k? stay alive so you can keep writing stuff for me to read...
    | Posted on 2005-09-08 00:00:00 | by unnatainable | [ Reply to This ]
      its good, it sounds like you really need to comfront your parents about whats wrong, im really sorry that your parents dont notice im lucky mine did or my friends did and my friends told my parents, if this is true about you and your parents you really should get help.
    | Posted on 2005-09-04 00:00:00 | by stateXofXmind | [ Reply to This ]
      it was good, the emotion to reaching out to your parents felt real, i personaly think it had good flow, real emotion, but it cut off to soon, but still liked it

    -Ashes
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by BlindToYou | [ Reply to This ]


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