longing for your broken love by Seedofbayne

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Submission Name: longing for your broken love dots

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Author:	Seedofbayne
ASL Info:	19/M/MA
Elite Ratio:	3.37 - 55/82/27
Words:	150

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	321
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	789

Description:
anything...this was straioght from my heart...so tear me up if you feel the need

longing for your broken love dots

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Now that i long for the love we once shared
i try to find, but im alone and scared
i know ill never find another quite like you
even if i did, i wouldn't know what to do

it kills me inside that im the one who left
but when it comes to the heart im not one to jest
i might have been hurt a bit, but ill get over it
but i chewed you up and only to find what your truly about

i love you dearly
your still close to my heart
you don't feel the same
and that tears me apart

i wish to know if what we had was true
and with ever last breath i want to be with you

also i took time and taped up your heart
Hi, I LOVE you, Lets go back to start

Submitted on 2005-08-22 22:43:02 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  would you care to tell me who this poem is about michael cause you have been actin weird lately wen i talk to you.. its like ur depressed but u shouldnt b..?
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  my favorite stanza was the last one. it concluded your poem well. the thing that i didnt really like about your poem was the ryhme scheme it seemed at bit too simple for me. sometimes a poem is more powerful when you dont ryhme because you can describe your feelings in depth. This is a common topic to write about...but overall, nice job.~where in MA do you live? jw
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
  i keep readin this over and over agen.. its like im drawn to this.. mayb its jus cuz of the talk we jus had n now were not talkin.. or mayb its jus cuz i wish things were how they used to be i kind of miss not bein able to kiss you or hold you.. but i think were to far gone to go back down that path
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow hunn this is amazing and yet seems all to familiar - i vote this one of your best works yet in my mind! You really out did yourself love! I love the word useage and rythem i think you did and amazing job - honestly i see this as you advancing and doing better

i love you millions!
<<3 Me
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]

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