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    dots Submission Name: I cry not for youdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 582
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    dotsI cry not for youdots
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    You left me here,
    crying
    heart breaking
    bleeding,
    for your own selfish reasons.
    I begged you not to go,
    pleaded
    promised
    screamed,
    for you not to leave this way.
    I cried,
    not for my pain
    but for his,
    for the pain he will feel
    when he finds out the truth.
    I cried for hte confusion
    he will have
    when you don't come back.
    My heart broke
    for his innocence,
    for all the love he has for you
    in his sweet little heart.
    I screamed,
    for my own anger
    screamed for your selfishness
    screamed for my own stupidity,
    for letting you into his life.
    And now,
    I pray
    that he will soon forget you,
    prey you'll never come back again...




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 06:28:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good. Sounds like you losta love or a dear friend of yours. KEEP IT UP.
    Sincerely,
    Andrew Jackson.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ajjax1705 | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds as though your screaming for lost love.. not just yours but everyone elses.. its good i like the emotion behind it n how it seems so real
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read this poem it sounded like a single mother whos boyfriend decided to leave. It sounds like she's crying because he's leaving her child fatherless again when he didn't even need to be in his life. Great read!
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by DeeBaby6389 | [ Reply to This ]


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