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    dots Submission Name: One Last Dancedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 651
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    Bytes: 973



    Description:
       my sad, sad story of a love that was, then wasn't, then almost was again, but wasn't...blah blah blah..


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    dotsOne Last Dancedots
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    Together
    we floated away
    into the sky,
    the stars lighting the way.
    The magic in the air was thick,
    as I felt your hand slide across my back
    our bodies pressed against each other,
    felt so right.
    To dance with you again
    was a dream come true,
    being lead across the dance floor
    to loves melody.
    I could feel my heart skip a beat
    as I breathed in your familiar scent.
    Closer to the moon we glide,
    spinning round in circles
    no one else in sight.
    I was once again
    swept off my feet
    by your love,
    but the song came to an end
    and I realized,
    our dance couldn't last forever.
    Now I stand
    alone in the dark
    withonly memories of you
    in my heart,
    and hope
    that one day
    you'll be back again
    but this time,
    I'll be sure the song
    will never end...




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 06:37:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is awesome! im sry about ur love life! mines messed up 2! so ur not the only one! anyway u r a good writer! anyway u could really tell that u lvoed this presonZ! so that was coolA!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely touching.. I got the bumps towards the end... You have talent there I see. I hope every ones song can last forever...It sucks when it ends 'cause all you have is the memory.
    Well hope he'll com eback again.

    P.S. I added this to my Fave! -Sharon Marroquin
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      You deffidently are a good writer. Plus you sound like you are in love or atleast were in love. Well keep it up with ur writing.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ajjax1705 | [ Reply to This ]
      you sound as tho you once had love in your grip and then it slippd away somehow with out you realizing.. its sweet n sad n it makes you feel as if your standing there in the backround watchin on
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely and I can relate so fine with what you are saying here. Me dancing with a certain person holds very special memories for me. When I read this they all came flooding back in an instant. Thanks for that ! Superbly written.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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