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    dots Submission Name: Thus Shall I Remaindots
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    Author: melancholymaid
    ASL Info:    24/female/Tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 112/136/34
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 848
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    Description:
       I can't really describe this. I really don't remember what compelled me to write this, other than my ongoing personal battle with myself and other people's perceptions of me. Whatever. If you decide to read this, please don't post any negative feed back. I'm not in the mood. Thanks as always,
    Samantha (Melancholymaid)


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    dotsThus Shall I Remaindots
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    Thus I shall remain,
    heaving,
    scarring,
    tearing down iron gates,
    blazing collapsed cities.

    The harm was already there
    when I arrived.

    I did nothing but finish the incident.

    There are never any ashed left over for me.




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 12:22:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it the flow was very nice and so was the imagery. i think you caouldve gone a little farther with it but i know if i had wirrten it i would be think 'i think i went far enough thank you' so i dont know why i'm telling you that but oh well. i liked the lines

    "The harm was already there
    when I arrived."
    i dont knwo i juts like the way they sound i guess
    well good job
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by ira | [ Reply to This ]


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