Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
    • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
    • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Follow me.....dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: pj5
    ASL Info:    37/f/IOWA
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 40/41/10
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 236
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 428



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsFollow me.....dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Follow me.....

    Follow me... through your eyes,
    never to hurt you with lies.
    Follow me... into a safe place,
    never screaming or getting on your case.
    Follow me.. into my heart,
    your love needs a fresh start.
    Follow me... and you will find,
    I am always kind.
    Follow me... and you will see,
    we will last through eternity.

    by pj5




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 13:46:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this one! It shows your emotions in it...and how you love this person. I love the ending...it was very smooth. It is also great how you kept the same rythem/beat thoughout.

    Follow me.. into my heart,
    your love needs a fresh start.

    That is my favorite line...it shows/tells how you want to be w/ this person....2 thumbs up :)

    Mikki
    x3
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      A beautiful love declaration. It's rare to read a poem that positive. I mean, most of love poems are sad, and they talk of desperate love, or longing. I like sad love, it gets me inspired, but I find it much more difficult to write about happy love without getting Britney Spears "Love u baby, I'm a slavbe 4 u", so I really admire you for writing such a pure thing. I wish I could be that serene...
    Great job, I really like it, hope to read more from you :-)
    Laurie
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Muse in White | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.