Description: Tell me why you think after all the hard work she put into this...after the emotion that she used to make this art, why she in the end erased it...I mean I know what I think but this is sort of a 'what YOU get out of it' kind of poem. So yeah tell me what you think. Did I do okay?
The Artist -------------------------------------------
he watches her hands fly across the page
and eyes that seemed to see another world
not watching the skin but maybe the bones underneath
or maybe something deeper like the heart
and from her pencil comes emotions
a charcoal broken heart
anger and sorrow with black ink
emotions drawn so you could see
he watched her hands fly down the page
and suddenly she stopped
she wept awhile
cried until her tears blended with the paint
mixed in as the color of rain
and when she finished
she took the pencil, turned it over
and erased it all
two comments on 1 poem i say it is still awesome anyways thanx for the reply i posted Into my soul on friday i am getting discouraged as i have 8 books ready to go to publish the publishers want want want but as my divorce and life is very complicated right now i have to wait i dont no how long either so it gets a little frustrating i thimk you will enjoy i will be posting the book approx 700 to 1000 words at a time so enjoy copy and paste and you might have the only copy it will take maybe a month or so but i wont delete until i no youve read the posts thanx again for your king words and great poems to read Sandman
"he watches her hands fly across the pages her eyes seem to see another, that world he watches her skin or maybe her bones underneath him deeper like her heart."
this was the best poem i've read in months! and that is not just flattery. the end...was a shock to my system, wasn't expecting that at all...and i must say i think you did great.
and when she finished she took the pencil, turned it over and erased it all
this was extemely beautiful do you feel this way after you write i no i do i am going to take some time off witing i want to thank you for all you great words take care and keep writing i still say you are very talented thanx sandman
You are very talented. I loved it. It reminds me of life. When someone begins down a path doing just fine and then somthing happens to change it so you have to erase what was and start over again. Wow I definetely going into my favorites. Thank you God Bless
i like this.. its sad its like she thinks its not good enuff so she starts over.. kinda of like hoo some ppl dont think there good enuff n they find ways to redo themselfs..
Maybe she was trying to erase the heartache she was feeling. She drew her emotions, put them onto paper and then erased them, wanted them to disappear...I don't know..lol, but this was a very creative piece. I liked how much emotion I felt as read this. Great job! Alissa
Hmmm...I liked this poem...but why did she erase it? In my opinion she was drawing a boy...a boy that hurt her...she drew her pain then didn't want to remember it so she erased it all...mabey hoping to erase the pain with it. So was I close at all? Oh...and while we are on the subject...Eric and Tony are here...like RIGHT here...good god that guys hair has gotten long...And Tony has gotten skinny...they came by to pay a wrecker bill or something...(Eric is pretty...lol)
i erase most of what i write.and the stuff i dont,i probably should.lol. this evoked no emotion in me,but correlations and imagery were nice.ive read alot better from you.this was cool though
I think this is great, I mean and from her pencil comes emotions a charcoal broken heart anger and sorrow with black ink emotions drawn so you could see
was my favorite phase you wrote. Sometimes it easier to write or draw emotions, and some times it makes some emotions better to erase and forget them.
Submission Name: The Artist
