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confident beauty

Author: Oli
ASL Info:    23/F
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Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Mirror or Mask
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This is another poem in the "Beautiful?" series. This will be the last one I think. It's nothing special. Just the conclusion. It explains more than the haiku I wrote about it.

confident beauty

The glass infront of her
shows a girl
once an ugly creature
torn by lies and dinial
but now reveales
a radiant being
no longer does she hide her face
no longer does she hate
She sees the truth
the lies have vanished
and no longer hold her captive
she sees the beauty once hidden
she is free
her face shines
changed and mature
she holds confidance in her face
she walks with a steady step
confident but not proud nor aragant
she is ready for the new day

Submitted on 2005-08-23 14:56:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  who would have known i would hate the mirror the site of myself brought you so much nearer... these words come to mind as I read your beautiful journey of self discovery. I was in a relationship with a man who would never llet me be the true free spirit I was. never let anyone make you beleive that you are worth more than you are, which is always PRICELESS!

talk to you later,
| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a nice uplifting piece.

I'd get some help with the spelling, though. There are quite a few errors in there, I know a lot of you don't seem to care, but it does detract from a reader's enjoyment of the poem, so I feel it's important.

Apart from the spelling, I thought it was excellent!
Very inspirational.

Be Happy

| Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]

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