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    dots Submission Name: confident beautydots
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    Author: Oli
    ASL Info:    23/F
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 206/211/53
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 1102
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 580



    Description:
       This is another poem in the "Beautiful?" series. This will be the last one I think. It's nothing special. Just the conclusion. It explains more than the haiku I wrote about it.


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    dotsconfident beautydots
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    The glass infront of her
    shows a girl
    once an ugly creature
    torn by lies and dinial
    but now reveales
    a radiant being
    no longer does she hide her face
    no longer does she hate
    She sees the truth
    the lies have vanished
    and no longer hold her captive
    she sees the beauty once hidden
    she is free
    her face shines
    changed and mature
    she holds confidance in her face
    she walks with a steady step
    confident but not proud nor aragant
    she is ready for the new day




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 14:56:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      who would have known i would hate the mirror the site of myself brought you so much nearer... these words come to mind as I read your beautiful journey of self discovery. I was in a relationship with a man who would never llet me be the true free spirit I was. never let anyone make you beleive that you are worth more than you are, which is always PRICELESS!

    talk to you later,
    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice uplifting piece.

    I'd get some help with the spelling, though. There are quite a few errors in there, I know a lot of you don't seem to care, but it does detract from a reader's enjoyment of the poem, so I feel it's important.

    Apart from the spelling, I thought it was excellent!
    Very inspirational.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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