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    dots Submission Name: Restless Nightdots
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    Author: whchong
    ASL Info:    26 / M / Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 93/43/14
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Bytes: 460



    Description:
       A person's deepest fear


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    dotsRestless Nightdots
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    Sleep eluded her that night
    Though nothing gave her fright
    Her book, then, she read
    Weariness would soon bring her to bed

    The words passed line by line
    Yet none registered in her mind
    Her thoughts were elsewhere
    Of one whom knew not of her care

    It all became clear
    Darkness was not her deepest fear
    She cried throughout the night
    For solitude had taken away her might




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 21:17:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A short piece but very nifty and very deftly done with some fine rhyme setting a certain mood .... I liked it a great deal ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      ryme and format was nice.lonliness is one of my worst fears,as it is for many,so topic is a close one.i wish it would have evoked more emotions foe me personally.

    short,needs more elaboration from youre heart.

    all one cat's opinion

    cool

    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      AWESOME. THAT WAS ME LAST NIGHT. LOL. READING AN ASTROLOGY BOOK... HAHAHA. I LOVE THE MIDDLE STANZA. YIPPEE MAN...I'M ON A HAPPY PILL RIGHT NOW...SORRY IF I'M BEING TOO HAPPY.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]
      it's a bit fragmented, to be honest. This has potential though. Try working on word choice and switching up the rhyme scheme a bit. Don't force it, let it come to you.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      true im one of those ppl who need ppl im sorry but if you stick me in a room by myself i will lose my flippen mind.but anywya it was a good poem.

    ~Gena~
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by luvy | [ Reply to This ]


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