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    dots Submission Name: sleepwalking towards freedomdots
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    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 964
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1603



    Description:
       finally broke writers block.


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    dotssleepwalking towards freedomdots
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    V:
    She pulls the trigger and waits for a split-second death
    It’s a good night to die, always a good night to try
    The nightmares she’s tamed have come back to haunt her
    This is the last time she’ll bleed under the cover of moonlight

    Prec:
    Falling deeper into what she believes to be peace
    She crawls out from her skin just to feel complete

    C:
    And she’s choking on secrets, she’s dying with regrets
    She’s praying for mercy, from a God that she don’t believe
    And she’s leaving them all behind, tonight

    V:
    Seasons change but the pain lasts forever
    And after 17 years nothing’s changed after all
    Sooner or later they’ll come and get her
    And with blood stained hands she’ll greet them all

    Prec:
    Falling deeper into what she believes to be peace
    She crawls out from her skin just to feel complete

    C:
    And she’s choking on secrets, she’s dying with regrets
    She’s praying for mercy, from a God that she don’t believe
    And she’s leaving them all behind, tonight

    Bridge

    V:
    It’s not the noise so much as the silence
    That destroys the only hope she’s got left
    She closes her eyes while her hands shake beside her
    And whispers ‘I’m sorry’ with her dying breath

    C:
    Because she’s choking on secrets, she’s dying with regrets
    She’s praying for mercy, from a God that she don’t believe
    And she’s leaving them all behind, tonight




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 21:58:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Damn a good flow, but whats all anout those v,c and prec? i never seen this kind of poetry?(please comment for my poems..)Can you explain this form of poetry?
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by Soldier O_Tears | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like many things about this piece..i can relate to it very well for one...it describes feelings of depression/suicide very well indeed..i even love the title...

    It’s not the noise so much as the silence
    That destroys the only hope she’s got left


    these lines i thought were very well written and grabbed me more than the rest..having said that i still liked it very much on a whole as well..the only thing i think it lacks is the hope of real freedom...but thats just my thoughts :)..
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... I thought that was awesome. It has a hook from the begining and then it keeps you in. Like the other people said, it gives you really good images. It's got meaning to it. I know I'm not supposed to give only comments, but that was really good. Only thing, I don't understand the c,v, and prev either. The rest was fabulous.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Arianna | [ Reply to This ]


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