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    dots Submission Name: EVER AFTERdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this is in deepest dedication to my husband Corey we were children togeather and though our love has changed through the years it is still strong just diffrent


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    dotsEVER AFTERdots
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    There was a night not long ago
    When two souls were forged
    Two images carved from the same sacred stone
    Where does the freedom go
    Once we were not ashamed
    We swam amongst them
    Only water to cover us
    We shared each others taste
    I was yours,
    No need to be gentle
    We still fit that way though
    But its not the same
    Now I am fragile
    Your hands are careful
    Your words planned
    11 years
    I am still your angel




    Submitted on 2005-08-23 22:00:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great ending line. It left me with a powerful sense of longing and compassion. It was a bit rough in the beginning, but as the piece progressed I could really sense the emotion within the words. Solid work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-23 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      Ohhh...this was beautiful. It makes me want that someone sooo much more. I can't wait to feel that feeling, the feeling of unconditional love! This was a really great write!
    Alissa
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]


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