Description: I write a lot of sex poetry and romance poetry. I have been asked to put a piece on, which I wouldn't normally do, but it is tamer. I have edited it so it is R rated. Comments are most appreciated. I probably won't ever post again on this genre, so I hope this piece is enjoyed. I'm posting it while noone is on so only a select few will read it. I included some notes on reading it- these are pace notes. Placido means slower and softer, pesante means grander and faster. Enjoy!
The Hungry Beast -------------------------------------------
(Normal)
This hungry beast within--
It makes my crawling skin
Cry out to taste; to dine
On finest beauty,
Finest wine.
I seek a victim in the sea
Of faces set in filigree
To feel what I have ready
To turn your world
Into confetti.
(Placido)
My able soul is aching
To set your nails a- raking
On my sturdy able back
While we wrestle slowly
In the sack.
Ever loving, ever gentle,
My kiss is ever elemental
For I only seek to capture
Your face in
Multiple rapture.
(Normal)
When you think that I am finished--
My strength could only be diminished
And it is time to be parted
You will find
I’ve only started.
(Pesante)
I will start renewed with blessed haste
To push down upon your waist
As I pulse up with every thrust
Into the back wall
Of your lust.
And as finally your howls abet
And you spill on me a flow of wet
I absolutely guarantee
You’ll lose your mind
In ecstasy.
(Normal)
In my beastly heart-- I am ferocious
In my lusty mind-- I am most twisted
For my tongue will find spots in you
That you never knew existed.
So if you ever see me
With that look inside my eye
Run away or I will ruin you
For every other guy.
This is a good piece. The imagery is very good as is the flow. One critique. I would like to read the real version of this. You shouldn't water down a piece for whatever reason. This is you...a part of you.
You're a jenious. I knew it. You can make everything work, Techy-Q mehlove. I demand that you cease being so shy about things and post your little fingers to death with every bit that you write! We luff yous no matter whats, sos lets keeps its ups!...whoa...lots of S's...-shakes self out of that- Loved this, it's elegant and pretty and you're a Jenious to the fourth degree. ~SRC
I love it! Reminds me a little of my piece The Tease completed lol.. i felt apprehensive posting it too :)...but no i like this its not crude..its sexual, sensual and animalistic just as sex is...the nature of the beast lol ...i particularly liked the end...made me laugh but its also expressed very well... i like it!
In my beastly heart- I am ferocious In my lusty mind- I am most twisted For my tongue will find spots in you That you never knew existed. So if you ever see me With that look inside my eye Run away or I will ruin you For every other guy.
Okay, I would just love to meet you...lol! This was so tastefully erotic. Excellent job on the imagery and description. I'm really at a loss for words, I need to catch my breath...Anyway, I loved this and I hope you do post more! You have got talent, sweety! Alissa
Submission Name: The Hungry Beast
