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    dots Submission Name: Chasing a Rainbowdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsChasing a Rainbowdots
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    I'm running toward the chance
    of finding love,
    toward the possibility,
    that there's someone there for me.
    I run
    down the rockiest of paths,
    through the roughest of storms,
    I run.
    As fast as my legs will move
    I race my way
    toward the thought
    of finding happiness,
    toward the image
    of a beautiful beginning.
    I've been running
    so long,
    my heart feels like it will explode,
    my legs feel like stone.
    Yet I continue on my mission,
    through the setting of the sun
    and the rising of the moon.
    It's like chasing a rainbow,
    I know,
    But like every fairytale,
    it has to have an ending
    and I will not stop
    until I find
    my happy ending...




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 10:31:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this. I can relate to this because i too am looking for the love that you can't seem to seem to find that one person. Great write.
    I will most likely be looking for more of your poems.
    Michelle
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by michelle8586 | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy travelling ! All I will say is whatever you do, never give up and try to pace yourself as best you can. A really good write.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it, but I think some slight improvements can be made. For instance, don't repeat 'I run' in the beginning and you just use the idea of running far too much. I suggest you throw in some other ideas of your 'race' towards happiness. There are more adjectives out there.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      I was good. The author isnt going to give up on finding love. Good luck. I can relate to this alot. I once to was trying to find love and went through some tuff times and when I was about to give up there he was. My true love. Sorry to go on. Don't give up. God bless
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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