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    dots Submission Name: A Whisper in the Winddots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 497
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       not about suicide. It is a personal fav of mine. I hope you enjoy it.


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    dotsA Whisper in the Winddots
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    A whisper in the wind
    a star in the dark, night sky
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be,
    after we say our goodbyes.

    The morning dew that glistens,
    the sunlight all around
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be
    whenever you feel down.

    The bird that soars above you,
    a flower that blooms beneath
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be,
    to give you strength when you are weak.

    The shadows in the darkness,
    the rain cloud passing by
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be,
    ever after our goodbyes.




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 12:05:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, the image was good, I'll give you credit for that, but... I don't know it just didn't seem to be put together all that well. I get a bit of what you're saying, but it is rather confusing. As in, there is no point to be found.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this very much. It tells about how you can close your eyes and see the ones you lost and they give you hope and strength even when they are not physically here. I thought it was put together very well but I am no expert.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by 3TOMANY | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good.
    very good imagery in this piece it help the poem very well.
    my fave. line was


    "A whisper in the wind
    a star in the dark, night sky
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be,
    after we say our goodbyes."

    well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      It was beautiful. I thought it was soft and gentle. Like a good bye - never to forget the memories. I liked it . Good Write.
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Poetic Cure | [ Reply to This ]
      This was beautiful, I wish I could remember things like the poem implies, that would be a beautiful. This flowed nicely and beautifully, contributing to the, in my opinion, not terribly common but interesting subject. I'm glad I read this, beautiful.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by whiteshadows | [ Reply to This ]
      this was just buetifull it was good to read
    the flow was steaedy and felt good soemhow
    i am glade you wrote it
    cause i loved readin git
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the poem, it was a great end to my day. its realli beautiful and i cant relli think of anything else other than that, coz everyones sayd everything u can say, but watever, it was great, thax for writing it.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]
      ok just to be boring i have to agree with everyone else lol...no really it is very nicely written and brings beautiful images to mind ...it is very similar to things that i say to my gf :)...i loved this and am going to add it to my favs...the second verse was definitely my fav one..

    The morning dew that glistens,
    the sunlight all around
    Close your eyes
    that's where I'll be
    whenever you feel down.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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