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    dots Submission Name: Good Morning Moondots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 274



    Description:
       The moon hung around for a long portion of the morning yesterday - like it was checking out the day!

    Love,Peace,Joy!!! tif ; )


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    dotsGood Morning Moondots
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    Good Morning Moon
    sometimes lingers
    to the day
    Great Artist brush
    a white cap illusion
    special stroke among
    light cloudz
    How fortunate us on this
    special day
    The sun and moon beams
    light our way




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 13:56:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      seemed simple..but the agreement of two lights..sun and moon working together when usually they are opposites..night and day...

    showing that opposing forces can work together in harmony..that people who are total opposites in culture, race whatever...could also do that...

    and two people though very different..can rise together and spread light and love to the world...

    nice piece

    i like your writing..it is short and crisp..although this would actually classify as a poem..

    and quite a good one.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-06-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This has the light, airy feel of a child's poem, but it's much deeper than that. My only quibble is with 'cloudz', but it's wonderful work.

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2005-08-30 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      This was brief, but very good. I liked the imagery used int his poem. And I thought your flow was just perfect. Very grand to witness such a sight. I'm glad you got to see it. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      This was different. Very straight forward, simple, not too much, not too little. The light from the moon to me is more special then the light from the sun. You get such a feeling of serenity. All is quiet and calm. This was beautiful!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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