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    dots Submission Name: Secret Garden Teadots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       An evening at the lake - a lot of beers and where ever this came from.....hmmmmmm! he he he

    Love,Peace,Joy!!!
    tif ; )


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    dotsSecret Garden Teadots
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    Come as you
    Are
    2 the Secret Garden Tea

    Alice left Wonderland
    She's
    hangin with Epiphany

    If not now...
    when will
    "IT" Be?

    Take a toke on
    Hooka
    & have a Looka - C...

    Water to wine
    fresh off the vine

    All Supper's guest
    see everything's fine

    Forget what you know
    & what you see

    Reach in hidden pocket
    4 eternal key

    You, me, him
    she, All,
    we

    We pass crumpets
    not judgement
    at Secret Garden Tea

    There's no gauged
    distance
    or time spent here

    Smile
    after leaving your
    fear here

    We're a full-stocked
    bar
    care 4 a beer?

    Love's creation
    we "All"
    mirror *~*

    Thank you for coming
    stay as long as you wish

    Life a full-course meal
    not a single dish

    The tea is ongoing
    and love's always flowing
    @ the Secret Garden Tea

    No need for $ just sense
    Cheers!
    Admission's Free!




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      secret gardens,beer and place to retreat from the chores of everyday life..give me the address!hehe i liked this it cheered me up on a day when im feeling a little gloomy thank you :) my fav part is the passing of crumpets not judgement a light hearted way to say come in and relax,was cool thanks for sharing
    graham
    | Posted on 2005-08-31 00:00:00 | by gd66uk | [ Reply to This ]
      This reminds me of some friends who had this gorgeous garden
    I imagined to be Eden in their back yard. In front of their house, a city street and behind..paradise. It's a lovely write you've done here Tiff, it reminds me and everyone else here of a cool experience. Thanks for sharing your fun loving attitude.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, this was delightful!

    Vintage Epiphany, spacey and sideways, yet still getting its message across.

    I liked it a lot, LOVE the Alice reference, and all that beer must need some help, so I'm coming!

    A wonderful write, Princess

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      epiphany, there are a lot of barely concealed religious metaphors in this one and, of course, the alice in wonderland references.that is quite a combination.i don't think that i understood it you probably intended but i thought that i would give it a look and comment to the extent that i should.the rhyme scheme was also well thought out and your use of symbols was a change.i would like to say more but i am out of words and out of time.good luck and fare well. SoNNy
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      Very novel and highly original as usual. Secret gardens by their very nature are places of wonder and fantasy. One question, was the queen of hearts and the mad hatter there also ???
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      What beer alot of beer will do to someones muse.

    This was rather fun to read
    kinda made me wish I was there with you when this was going through your head.

    I agree there does seem to be a few religious undertones in this this
    but what ever.


    Very cleaver write

    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      ill agrre how fun to read was this?
    i loved the line
    Life a full-course meal
    not a single dish
    i just was hooked from the get go very nice very very nice
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice. I love the hospitable feel of this poem. It was a easy, care free, and sweet poem to read. This had a great flow. And it was like going to party as I read it. Great job.
    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like a wonderful party.. i'll pass on the beer, but the hooka sounds cool! a friend of mine brought one back from Egypt and we smoked some apricot tobacco in it... smooooooooooooooth.. i'll hang out in your garden anytime, it's always so peaceful and loving. thanks for the invite!
    peace&tea
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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