Description: After reading everyone elses poems...I decided to write one of my own. All fo these have similar elements but seem to be very different. I hope I've done justice to the subject.
In the background of my heart -------------------------------------------
A concert of melody
Interwoven by the maestro.
The laughter of the flute
mingles with chuckles for an oboe,
rising, then giving way to
the somber sounds of the cello.
The sun peaks out through
The echoes of joy and light.
Each lends a feeling of fullness
A connectivity to life as they
rise and fall in unison or harmony.
They vy for attention and then recede
to a memory.
But in an offstage room of my heart
recides a violin.
It's form covered in dust
with strings worn thin.
in the aftermath of a performance
lifes virtuoso remembers
and pays homage
to its glory days.
Resonating discordance as
meomories are plucked,
old love tries to blend with the new
Only in the silence of alone
can it's beauty be heard
playing in the background
of my heart.
Only there does it's beauty shine.
I like how you gave the sounds of the instruments emotional counterparts because my brain does that, and I do think the cello is likely the saddest instrument. In "recides a violin," did you mean resides?
Resonating discordance as meomories are plucked, old love tries to blend with the new but fails. Only in the silence of alone can it's beauty be heard playing in the background of my heart. Only there does it's beauty shine.
I love the idea of blending old and new love in a musical composition. That's lovely, but I'm no sure about "Only in the silence of alone." Maybe you could say "Only in the silence of solitude" (Sounds like a blend of Simon and Garfunkel and Suzanne Vega).
wow, this is indeed different. i love all the sounds you used for the different instruments.. unique and refreshing. the old and dusty violin sits alone in a room, representing an old love long gone.. but the memories remain and the violin plays once again, all alone... *sigh* you really have done a wonderful job with this one. i have read it a few times and can hear the music in my head... and then that lone violin... beautiful. peace&symphonies ~Cat
This was really great! I loved the whole idea of the symphony and then the one lone violin tucked away behind the scenes! You did a fantastic job with this challenge, as did everyone I think! We all have the same type of base idea, but convey it in very different ways, and I loved all of them. Great job! It was beautiful! Candi
after reading a few of these myself, I'd say you definently did the subject justice. I loved how you started it out, using actual musical references to tie it into what you are feeling. Everything seems so well put together, something I admire in others' works. Great job with this, it was very beautiful! makes me want to go pick up my guitar... maybe I'll just do that now. -Steph
Wow, how different indeed. Mine was about a light symphony playing in the background and yours has a single violin there...cool. I liked the orchestra references and they were very visual to me. Nice job Jan... Have a good one and keep smilin'