Description: This was about a guy that I hardly knew but made me feel sooo good and so happy the way I am. and I hope you like it
Hardly knew you -------------------------------------------
I hardly knew you
but instantly I fell in love
I was hanging on your every word
you had ever said
it makes me think that not all guys are the same
You gave me hope
To finally have true love once again
because before i would just shelter myself in
away from the world and everybody
so they wouldnt hurt me everytime they opened their mouth.
Baby you gave me everything
I thought I no longer could recieve
you are a part of what made me....me
not being afraid to show it...you know.
I guess thats why....I am very happy to say
.....you are the biggest part of me
WOW...I feel really special right now and i'm glad that i make u feel that way...its also a really nice poem what makes me wonder though how long it take u to right this??? lol well ttyl
I like this alot. It's very raw and honest. It didn't compare your love to anything, and it didn't elaborate, which might make it better, but I like it nonetheless. I can relate, but I'm sure you don't care. My only advice would be to elaborate and maybe say something about why you fell in love.
i think its really honest and off the cuff but i have to admit that i didnt like the start so much..its the same sort of thing that ive read so many times...so i guess im saying its cliché...however...i do love the end of it very much..
Baby you gave me everything I thought I no longer could recieve you are a part of what made me...me not being afraid to show it...you know. I guess thats why...I am very happy to say ...you are the biggest part of me
and think that this has the makings of a fantastic piece not just a good one...if it had alittle more work...but thats just my view.. you have to be happy with your own stuff and sometimes its more important that its really personal to you...
Submission Name: Hardly knew you
