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Hardly knew you


Author: POETRY
ASL Info:    17/f/az
Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 259 /141 /37
Words: 112
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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This was about a guy that I hardly knew but made me feel sooo good and so happy the way I am. and I hope you like it


Hardly knew you



I hardly knew you
but instantly I fell in love
I was hanging on your every word
you had ever said
it makes me think that not all guys are the same
You gave me hope
To finally have true love once again
because before i would just shelter myself in
away from the world and everybody
so they wouldnt hurt me everytime they opened their mouth.
Baby you gave me everything
I thought I no longer could recieve
you are a part of what made me....me
not being afraid to show it...you know.
I guess thats why....I am very happy to say
.....you are the biggest part of me




Submitted on 2005-08-24 19:27:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow... Lucky guy, your words, your feelings,
are a great pick me up I can see your smile.
take care.
Bobby K (aka) The Poorman's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW...I feel really special right now and i'm glad that i make u feel that way...its also a really nice poem what makes me wonder though how long it take u to right this??? lol well ttyl

Eric,
| Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this alot. It's very raw and honest. It didn't compare your love to anything, and it didn't elaborate, which might make it better, but I like it nonetheless. I can relate, but I'm sure you don't care. My only advice would be to elaborate and maybe say something about why you fell in love.

Naver alone: Haley
| Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by HECATE_Sservant | [ Reply to This ]
  i will agree there was no over thought in this wich is fine because oit didnt need it at all it just made sence and was easy to relate too good work
| Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
  i think its really honest and off the cuff but i have to admit that i didnt like the start so much..its the same sort of thing that ive read so many times...so i guess im saying its cliché...however...i do love the end of it very much..

Baby you gave me everything
I thought I no longer could recieve
you are a part of what made me...me
not being afraid to show it...you know.
I guess thats why...I am very happy to say
...you are the biggest part of me


and think that this has the makings of a fantastic piece not just a good one...if it had alittle more work...but thats just my view.. you have to be happy with your own stuff and sometimes its more important that its really personal to you...
| Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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