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    dots Submission Name: Midnight Massacredots
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    Author: brokensmile
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 241/326/148
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsMidnight Massacredots
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    They have to explode
    to be beautiful
    A midnight massacre
    of
    Reds
    Blues
    sometimes
    Golds
    Colliding
    like Chemical Lips
    Lighting upon eyes
    untill blind awe
    impairs
    even the shallowest
    of hearts

    Crammed the sky full
    so the stars
    coveted their power
    and choked them
    of air
    and life

    each died
    fell
    right out of
    existence
    leaving
    only a shameful
    smoke filled
    abscence
    for night
    settled heavily
    around her
    sorry Suicide.




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 20:58:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      cool. i kno its weird but i always like something that mentions suicide, even if its not entirely about it. i had a little trouble reading this, because it was so fragmented.
    still good though. keep it all up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the lines
    Colliding
    like Chemical Lips
    that is just awsome this was so perfect to me flow was amazing thought was totally there and the emotion was not smoothered by crap it didnt need you kept it simple but full of thought very very nice im addin it to my favs
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]


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