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    dots Submission Name: NIGHT ARTISTdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       t his stems from a painting i did once i kid you not when i say i painted it n the dark and came out just right to me anyway it still hangs in a hallway in my home hehehhe


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    Tonight you are my shelter.
    You are every rhythm ,ever song.
    It can last forever or just an hour.
    Doesn’t matter not to me, not tonight .
    I will let you cover me, hide me in your light.
    I only wished you’d let me finish .
    The drink.
    The evenings painting.
    I wish you hadn’t turned the light on .
    Everything is more beautiful in the dark.
    So ok you found me here
    Seems pathetic I am sure.
    Think whatever you like tonight.
    In your arms the anger leaves for a moment .
    I am someone’s something.
    There is peace in that .




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      As Kate said the punctuation was interesting, a different interesting. I like it though! Some of our best stuff is while were sitting there in the dark or at bed at night and get up and just start drawing in the dark. Theres something mysterious about the dark that makes things so much more interesting.The only thing that I would change or that I question is the second line... is it suppose to be like that? Or it suppose to be "every song"? or "ever sung"? Just wondering didn't quite understand that part. All in all it's very good. i really liked it. Some of the best stuff is created in the dark!
    Love it!
    ~manda
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by manderz_1207 | [ Reply to This ]
      The puncuation is... interesting. Not good or bad, just interesting. The subject is easy to relate to, I often find some of my best creations came at night. Over all a decent job. Keep it up.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an interesting piece and it makes the darkness a secure place of shelter - not as it's oft portrayed.
    Well done!
    Love,Peace,Joy! tif ; )
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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