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    dots Submission Name: as I staredots
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    Author: Di Re Rakord
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 130/125/30
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 2015
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    Bytes: 691



    Description:
       This is to her yet again, AND her new little boyfriend. Oh the fun times yet to come!!!!!
    (just so you know that is SARCASIM to its limits.)
    I really do hate how much love hurts but dont we all???


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    dotsas I staredots
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    Hi how are you
    slit your throat
    Later, good bye
    in your blood you shall float

    I dont like you
    i dont care
    I'll just kill you
    All of hell I bear

    I see you love her
    I see you holding hand's
    I see you want her
    But you cant see me where I stand

    Cut my wrist
    and slice my viens
    Cant take you anymore
    cant take the pain

    I see you fuck her
    I watch you there
    I see you leave her
    Now who cares?

    Kill you slowly
    Kill me slower
    You will feel me
    And I'll never know her




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 22:17:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not just sarcasm, lots of anger too. i know this is an older piece but the name caught me. ivve got one like this too, except its more about how i found out he was cheating so its a little bit more hateful. its a good write tho, quick and too the point!
    | Posted on 2010-12-18 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it even though its very different from the way i write and the poems i tend to like.. its very matter of fact hello [censored] you byebye...

    jthm ROCKS!
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW this wwas like a punch in the gut soo strong so much emotion i loved it t he last line was like BAMMM in fact the whole ending was awsome
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by layDsayD | [ Reply to This ]
      i hear ya man, this poem speeks truth, i felt the same [censored] too, and the intense anger you put into it was so real, also liked the ending too

    -Ashes
    | Posted on 2005-08-24 00:00:00 | by BlindToYou | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this is very manly. very...fuccck you!um. i like it. its powerful and kick assshole. :) i want a man like this.

    "I see you [censored] her
    I watch you there
    I see you leave her
    Now who cares?"

    ...eh...love...and sex...very different things...[censored]kkking [censored]. i'm heartbroken too. don't feel alone...
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by graffitijeans | [ Reply to This ]


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