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    dots Submission Name: Over Theredots
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    Author: dylanpoe
    ASL Info:    21 m la
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 322/332/56
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 904
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1873



    Description:
       This is inspired by and written for the family and friends that I have "Over There"......and who has ever gone "Over There"...

    If you are looking for politics or anti and pro-war propaganda, I'm afraid you won't find it here.....

    Before you read this, say a prayer for those
    "Over There"


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    dotsOver Theredots
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    The time has come
    For somebody, to go over there
    You can hear the beat of the drum
    As they get ready to go over there


    It's time to face it
    There's no more hiding
    Fear has come out
    There's no need to trace it
    Over there
    Over there
    Where somebody is gonna die
    Change will be in somebodys life
    A father
    A mother
    A son
    A daughter
    Cousin
    Or grandparent
    But it's apparent
    As they get ready to go
    Over there
    Over there

    There's gonna be tears shed
    There's gonna be things said
    That certain people will cherish forever
    There's gonna be things done
    Actions that can't be undone
    That people will remember forever

    Kids will have nightmares
    As they realize, that mama and daddy
    May not be bringing home a teddybear
    The soldiers will face numerous scares
    Pregnant wifes
    Beauty pagents
    All-Star little league
    All this weight, plus the pack
    Can give a man fatigue

    Over there
    Over there
    Somebody has to go
    Over there

    They have their doubts
    As their mind roams the clouds
    His wife goes through it too
    Trying to keep in touch
    With an "I love you"
    Every bullet has a name
    Whether it's mama
    Or their daughter Jane
    Battling to stay the same
    Tears keep flowing like the rain

    Sweet dreams cover the noise
    As they think of their girls and boys
    Sweet home apple pie
    Covers the nightmare
    That somebody has to die

    Over there
    Over there
    They get ready to go
    Over there




    Submitted on 2005-08-24 23:29:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very deep and heartfelt write

    Death is something that is not the end
    people need to realize that a persons memory lasts forever
    How many times have you heard a relative talk about there grandmother and then it just keeps getting passed on thru time
    Not even to mention the fact that life is Eternal
    Its the beauty of life everlasting
    God Bless
    Ron

    And thank you for your recent comments I look forward to more of your writings
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      man i liked this. the war has claimed too many lives. i'm proud of our soldiers for fighting but they're not even really fighting in our country's defense. it's just a personal vendetta of bush's which is causing good people to lose their lives.
    | Posted on 2005-10-16 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Well thankfully, my honey just got back..TODAY! :) Thank you so much for writing this. I'll never pretend to know what it's like OVER THERE...but...after listening to him explain it..and watching or more like hearing...him live it..I have so much respect...for the men and women that are there. And their families as well. Again..thanks for writing this. Take care. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-10-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey! Thank you so much for writing this! My boyfriend has been in "OVER THERE" for about 6 months now. No one could ever know what it is like for them over there...I guess no one does until your put in that situation...thanks for writing this. Having someone I love over there...I know it meant lot to me. Thanks again. ~hailie~ Great job by the way~
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG Ben. That really touched me deep down. That to me ranks up there in the touching lyrics with Arlington. I could here Trace singing it in my head as I read it. Keep em coming hun.
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by arriana_l | [ Reply to This ]
      gosh Ben... i really don'tk now what to say...

    ok... i really don't want to think about the people i've lost cus i don't wanna cry...

    so this is quite better..


    "Over there
    Over there
    Somebody has to go
    Over there" <you can quite hear the rythm in your head... like how the sticks hit the drums

    just "pour out a lil liquer" and keep on writing...never look down but keep your head up

    Kay
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      Dylanpoe? Is that you? Now, I must admit that there for a little while...you got away from yourself...but this is the you I originally remember. Such heart and devotion was put into this piece. I love it!

    I'm not saying that any of your recent pieces were bad...they were good...they just were a little off from the "original" you I met a LONG time ago.

    This is a fave!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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