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    dots Submission Name: The Four Seconds To The Yeardots
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    Author: Skeletor
    ASL Info:    20/M/Lancaster, CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.83 - 25/11/6
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 167
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       A poem about nature, one of my favorite things in this life. Perfection laid about for our admiration.


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    dotsThe Four Seconds To The Yeardots
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    Like a mutual suicide pact
    The leaves plummet in numbers.
    They mix: rust, cinnamon, gold.
    An autumn rainbow.

    Descend with the gauge.
    All that’s alive, now slowly dying.
    Roots veiled from winter’s fury.
    The sparkling coat of ice and cold.

    Gradually, the diamonds relent,
    The greenery springs brightly.
    Dew drops glistening
    Proclaiming loudly:
    Alive! What was once dead!

    Scorching and rising
    The sphere above bakes the land
    Frigidity becomes an amenity
    So long forgotten.

    With gracious eventuality,
    Harvest in bloom,
    And withering present,
    Autumn shines again soon.




    Submitted on 2005-08-25 00:24:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was great! I love the seasons and you captured each one of them beautifully. You also started off with my most favorite season of all! Your imagery took me through each season as though I was standing in the midst of each one for that brief moment in time. Great job!
    Candi
    | Posted on 2005-08-26 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is quite good. "So long forgotten" "Like a mutual suicide pact" "Dew drops glistening, proclaiming loudly" there are some really good lines worked into this piece. Well done, continue to write it's really good.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Cat | [ Reply to This ]
      A very well-written and thoughtful poem, you have taken the reader through the changes in chronological and seasonal order. There is a subtle hint of a grand design in the choice of words.

    Well done!
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Lots of nice imagery here for the reader to absorb and enjoy. Very descriptive and covers the four seasons well. I think that's why we never moved south. I truly enjoy the change of seasons and cant really quite decide which one I like best. Very enjoyable read, well done. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]



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