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    dots Submission Name: Gravitydots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsGravitydots
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    Gravity is the source of my depression,
    for it holds me down without consent.
    Like shackles on my feet,
    it keeps me from my dreams of flight.





    Submitted on 2004-01-11 08:17:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel this. sometimes it feels like im carrying the weight of the world and yes dreams are the last thing on my mind. I do take to your work im liking it so far. I like that holds me down without consent, we never asks for these things they just happen. my mood goes down at tad when I read this but its good. mike
    | Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]
      short and sweet, as usual =^..^= ~Coraz
    | Posted on 2004-01-11 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      on the other hand, gravity is an excellent thing. ain't no place to go but up.
    otherwise, nice piece. sometimes in the depths of depression our brains, our hearts seem to expect extraordinary things of our bodies...like dreaming, and flight. start small.

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-01-11 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]


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