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    dots Submission Name: To My Dear Little Deerdots
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    Author: Crow
    ASL Info:    21/f/Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 409/471/70
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 278
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    Description:
       Okie, first offageness....

    There is not supposed to be a pattern here, my friend Kateness is too damned off teh wall and insane for a pattern to hold her in, so this is supposed to be sporadic and jumping about, but, it should still be fairly easy to read.

    Most of this is inside jokes. Well, alright, all of it is inside jokes. D
    "WE FOUND THE GOOD ONE!!"
    "...what was that dear?"

    heheheeeee...hah...heheheh...Can't wait for Kate to read, it's mostly just written for her, so any corrections or questions to elaborate will be ignored, unless they're grammatical.


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    dotsTo My Dear Little Deerdots
    -------------------------------------------


    She can be summed up
    in only five words.
    Nothing Can Sum Up Kate.
    She's too good for that.

    (or, at least I think the word is good,
    it might be crazy
    or perhaps she's sane
    and it's the rest of us that need mental aid...)

    In a lonely world
    full of darkness and tears
    Kate showed me the way
    and brought me into the light.

    After that single, fateful day
    nothing was ever again the same.
    Plunged into a world
    that was entirely...well. Odd.

    Raptors chasing us through jungles
    and little gnomes about our feet
    plaid-patterned dragons flying high
    breathing out flares of...Miracle grow?

    Searching for pens
    In the tombs of the aincients
    and oh what luck this is!
    We found the good one!

    doing pilates and yoga alike
    before going on stage to perform
    playing in pools and laughing a lot
    Turninng into a little pink mole.

    Flying hamsters!
    Coconuts falling!!
    QUICK! INTO THAT CARDBOARD BOX!
    You're such a good dragon, you know...

    Kate, you're a Deer,
    A dear little Deer, my dear.
    Oh dear that was redundant...
    Break from the pattern! THE BUNS!

    Yes, I admit it!
    I molested that thing!
    It's buns were entirely great.
    (Though the pickle was very good too...)

    On with our lives,
    and moving away
    but we'll always have more adventures!
    Just you wait untill I come to visit!

    Nothing will ever, not ever, not ever again
    be the same.

    Kateness!! I luff you's, you dear little deer of mine! Stay rofty!




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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh, it's wonderful! I have a relationship just like this with my dear cousin Jessie. She wrote something like this, but it's an epic, and she won't post it. I love it, I just love it. It's wonderful. And I am referring to this, not her poem, though it is wonderful, too. I love poetry like this, where you have no idea what is going on, but it's wonderful all the same! Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really cute! Even if it is full of inside jokes that leave the reader utterly clueless as to what's going on, it's still obviously a dear piece for your friendship and the special things you share. Very nice.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-08-29 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      Once again I love this for the inside joke quality. I love inside jokes, although everyone on the outside gets completely annoyed by them. Makes me want to write one of these badly. I think I might in the future. I don't understand the majority of this, but I assume it's funny to you, so I'm pleased knowing you're happy haha.

    End transmission
    | Posted on 2005-08-28 00:00:00 | by Mrs Peabody | [ Reply to This ]
      *sides split apart* HAAAAAAAAAAA!
    Thank you, my friend, thanks a thousand times over! I don't think I could ever be saying this, but this work is crunk fo shizzle! Oh DEAR, whatever shall I give for a response to such an honest, sporatic presentation??

    "In a lonely world
    Full of darkness and tears,
    Kate showed me the way and
    brought me into the light"
    *jumps up and down pointing frantically* SEE, people of Eliteskillishness, I DID that! I'm also going to put this in my Favourites Folder of Chaos! Hmph...too bad nothin' rhymes with that...
    | Posted on 2005-08-27 00:00:00 | by Trufflepiggy | [ Reply to This ]
      This was fun to read like you said! A lot of inside jokes and just good wholesome times shared with a friend. Way to put it onto paper. I just started cracking up and the miracle grow line, HA! I could just picture two young ladies wondering that and the look an their faces as they hit that thought in unison and wondered...then laughed. Cool beans man. This was a delightful read...have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly, I really don't know what to think of this...It has Alice In Wonderland practically tattooed on it. I like the language though. Pretty good job.
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Skeletor | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, if you give yourself a comment, does it register as giving a comment, or getting a comment? or does it just neutralize itself?
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      Sicobe, this is lovely! Apart from being full of your in jokes, I can still appreciate the sort of magical mystery tour that the two of you go on all the time.

    You said what you wanted to say in a lovely way, and I thought this was enjoyable for all to read, but, like you, I can't wait till she gets to see it! She'ss love it!

    Wonderful stuff, and grammatically fine,

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-08-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]



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